A classmate or your best friend may give you power and even change you greatly from time to time, but neverthless, （重复否定，中心句要在这个地方断句。） your parents will company you and change you throughout your life, no matter you are a child , a teenage or even a adult. （中心句体现的文章展开的层次有新意，值得鼓励，就是要写出自己的风格！）

A classmate or your best friend may give you power and even change you greatly from time to time. （现在开始是中心句）Nevertheless, your parents will accompany you and change you throughout your life, no matter you are a child, a teenager or even an adult.

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To my point of view, it is parents rather than classmates that have more influence on children’s success on the ground that they can attain more capacities from their parents, namely brilliant comprehension, disinterested judgment and conscientious action.

（这个主题句写得好，清楚，明确，也没有语法上的问题。“优秀是卓越的大敌”，于是我们把它再精简一点。）

To my point of view, parents are more influential on children’s success with their brilliant comprehension, disinterested judgment and conscientious action.

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Despite the fact that classmates can influence our success more or less. However. Parents will influence us more on child’s success.

（despite表示让步，让完步以后还要接自己最终要说的东西以后，才能叫一句话啊，所以不能在more or less后就用句号了。）

Despite the fact that classmates can influence our success more or less, parents will influence us more on child’s success.

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Personally, Playing game counts in that enlightening wisdom, cultivating spiritual intelligence, and disciplining teams spirit.

其实这个句式没有必要用count这个单词，反而使人觉得累赘，同学们英语学到后来，你们要学会用简洁的语言来表达。套用模版到最好也要“甩啦甩啦”。

Personally, playing game enlightens wisdom, cultivates spiritual intelligence, and discipline teams spirit.

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As far as I am concered, playing games counts in that  games which makes people learn something effectively is relaxing and it could offer some enlightenments.

count这个单词有时候可以不用，这个对仗不太对称，而且这个时候不要用定从实现紧凑句式，因为文章要从三个方面说，就把三个方面清清楚楚的拉开说就最好了。

As far as I am concerned, playing games makes people efficient, relaxed and enlightened.